Rainy Day Tango

rain thrumming outside
– – Tuesday afternoon
unheeding of life indoors
– – watching the rain pouring down
refreshing the earth
– – making puddles dance
pattering down through the leaves
– – moving in lively rhythm
the bobbing and swaying leaves
– – keeping a tempo of life

– – – – – – – –

This is another of my experiments with forms, which I call a “Dual Tanka.” The key to this new form is that it is two Tanka with their lines interleaved. Each Tanka can be read independently or the work can be read as a whole. In other words, this is three poems in one.

In case it is not obvious, the second Tanka’s lines are indented with “– –”.

Note: a regular Tanka is five lines, with syllable counts of 5/7/5/7/7. Each half of a Dual Tanka has the same syllable counts, so that it comes out 5/5/7/7/5/5/7/7/7/7.

If you do write your own Dual Tanka, be sure to leave a link so I can come read it.

4 comments

  1. According to what I found, the Symbi has six lines with syllable counts of 5/5/7/5/5/7. The first, third, and fifth lines are written so as to make a Haiku within the whole, having a unified meaning separate from the whole.

    I intend to try writing one, and I believe I will start with the Haiku. Once I have it, I can turn the rest of it.

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